This is my student's best effort for her English lesson. Try to understand the essay, it's enjoyable, really. Plus, it is really rare to find a student at the school who will write this long.
Last school holiday, I and family opportunity finish time altogether grandfather and grandmother at village. We village place at Kota Bharu Kelantan. Reason we related return village have for to visit grandfather and grandmother who rich far from we. Beside that also, we agong to visit sibling advance who complete old no encounter.Arrive at there, grandfather and grandmother welcome return we related. With smile who sweet we shake hand with grandfather and grandmother. At there we earn looking scenery what intensely see and interesting. Foresee paddy-field who spread out broad at there shere amaze with scenery who see. We also earn looking will raillery who green encompass village we.
At cleave afternoon, grandfather bring we orchard fruit. Correct at break never this season fruit at village we. Diverse fruit who looking cook see fruit watermelon, fruit mango, fruit durian and fruit mangosteen. Free cite fruit we altogether return at house and rest.
At tomorrow morning, I, brother and sister go at river akin friend who dissimilar see zuki, aiman, siti and mira for angle fish. We also agong finish time akin they because we guess diaphanous encounter already old omit at Kuala Lumpur. For add anew happiness we, we catch finish with applied net and casting-net. Looking many fish who hung at net we see catfish.
At time afternoon again, grandfather bring we encompass village while looking area livestock animals see cow, goat, bird and rabbit. We earn looking see animal at there. Brother catch photo bird camel and bird peacock for at become memory when we return at Kuala Lumpur bide.
Already one week we leave at there, nowadays arrive time for we return at Kuala Lumpur for back to school. Feel happy convert become sorrow looking at to mak smooth or fine lineament grandfather and grandmother before we family omit. We so very happy when rich at village although happen assume it one memory who sweet and no earn we forget. - Anonymous
2 comments:
I was looking through the blogs at Kelantan Bloggers when I saw this. I was an English teacher too, for 11 years, in Rantau Panjang, Pasir Mas (town and rural) and Tanah Merah (town) until the mid-90's. This student is most likely Malay - he had written it in this language first before translating word for word without taking into account the fundamental differences in both languages.
But there's a plus for him here - he made an effort. Most of the students I had taught could never write more than 120 words - and that too with at least 50% mistakes in spelling, grammar and usage.
This student here - if his desire is strong enough, perhaps he should be encouraged to read... and read. But he must have access to English material.
It's exasperating and sad when I remember many of the students didn't have this. And their homes weren't places where reading was a normal activity.
Hopefully, more students would subscribe to the subsidised copies of NST and The Star... and read them, of course.
If a student starts at Form 3 and continues until the SPM on a steady basis, and assuming that s/he is average and is of "P8 class without the material", I'd say he should get something like C5 at least for the SPM.
Thanks for your comments.. 'He' is a 'She'.. and she is the best student in that class.. and the most hardworking.. but sadly she is now in form 4, next year will be her SPM.. and I wont be teaching her next year because other teacher teaches form 5.. hopefully she will prolong her desire to get better in her English.. I will support her all the way... cheers..
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